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[powerofdeath]

This is my research paper, if you wanna review it, go ahead. I wouldn't care less if nobody even bothered to read it.
Pretend theres a tab before every paragraph because tabs doesn't work here.
Ignore the way citation work because I have to follow my teacher's format.
Enjoy!

Homework Is Scarier Than You Think

Homework has been assigned to students for many centuries to improve student's knowledge on a particular subject. Homework assignment are given in order to help students understand content and allow students to practice and improve their knowledge. However, research shows that homework assignments may not be beneficial for young learners. For instance, young adults could be overwhelmed with homework assignments that could lead to stress. Many students have sports, clubs, and other activities after school. These busy schedules do not allow time for homework to be effectively completed. Even though homework assignments may help students practice and understand academic materials better, it is not beneficial for students because it can lead to stress, lengthy assignments takes time away from other productive activities after school, and it also can hinder their academic performance.

Majority of the students can be overwhelmed with the amount of homework assignments they receive. When a student becomes overwhelmed, they might have to work all day and all night to complete the homework assignment. Students work overnight to finish their assignments or project, they get tired. "Staying up late doing homework assignments is not healthy habit and it only leads to circle of continual bad habits the next day." Being overwhelmed with homework assignments can cause a student to miss vital hours of sleep. Whenever a student becomes tired, they do not focus as much (Giles 1). Getting overwhelmed with homework assignments can cause more harm to the students and students will not benefit from doing their assignments.

Students are stressed out occasionally, and it could cause a negative impact on their lives. Young adults can be stressed out by homework assignments. Being overwhelmed with work, lifestyle, sports, and having homework added to your life can lead to stress. Parents can pressure the students because they want their children to succeed. "Students can feels pressured to do homework by high pressure parenting with Ivy League goals that leave students feeling empty inside" (Michaud 1). Students may have issues at home and they would have a hard time concentrating on their homework. Being stressed out will only harms the student instead of benefiting them.

Plenty of students struggled to find free time with everything going on in their life. Students spend about eight hours sleeping, and another eight hours at school, which leave them eight hours a day to do everything else. A lot of high school students are on at least one sport team, many students have to work, and many students have different activities they need to do in their life. "Teenagers, as a whole, like to have fun and enjoy a social life but having many hours of homework a night makes this very difficult and if we are involved in extracurricular activities, it's near impossible without jeopardizing our sleep (Giles, 1). With a busy schedule, pupils will struggle finding time to do their homework assignments. When a student struggle to find one hour of their life, they will be stressed out and get overwhelmed.

There are families have low income and could not afford paying for the internet. Some of the homework assignments may require internet access. Students with no access are forced to stay after school, go to the library, or go to public place with free Wi-Fi like McDonald's. "Access to the Web has expanded since then, but roughly a third of households with income of less than $30,000 a year and teens living at home still don't have broadband access there, according to the Pew Research Center" (Troianovski 1) If a student cannot go to a place with Wi-Fi, that student is forced to accept a zero for the assignment. Students who have to travel just to get access to a source of Wi-Fi, expend more time and energy doing homework than those that have easy access.

Several homework assignments are irrelevant or not even helpful overall. Students could waste their time doing pointless assignments such as coloring assignment. "By the time I got to that assignment, at 2 in the morning, I found it irrelevant, tedious and not worth doing" said junior Israel Hipolito. "I got high scores on tests but a lower grade because of the coloring assignment." (Hipolito 2) Irreverent homework assignments are very pointless and it just waste students' free time. Students can feel less motivated to do their homework assignment if they do not see the point in doing them.

Students may fail many tests, but they can still improve a grade just because they did their homework. Receiving better grade does not reflect how much you simply learned. "A student might score no better than a D when tested in math, but because traditional grading awards points for handing in math homework, that student may earn a C or better in the class" (Bock, 1) According to the St. Charles High School, many students were on honor roll. After the school received their state test, they found out many of their students failed. Having a good grade does not reflect how much a student learns.

Several schools are implementing a new method in teaching the students. These schools are trying to teach the students without giving them homework assignments. Some teachers such as Becky Stevenson agreed that homework assignments should not be counted in your final grades. "She has been using pieces for the ideas in her classroom for at least five years, and gives feedback on homework even though it is not counted in the final grade, she also said her students have shifted from focusing on getting good grade to a desire to learn" (Bock 1). Students are learning better and desire to learn is a lot better for the students. Students may abuse the No Homework policy, but those who do will do worse on the tests according to Ethan Dobbs, a teacher who has the same policy. Evidences showed that no homework assignments are beneficial to the learners.

Many schoolchildren may have other people to do their homework for them. Some parents do homework assignments for their children for various reasons. Parents may do homework assignments so their children could look good, make it easier for them, and save work for the parents. "A tenth of parents who took part said it saved stress if they did the work themselves, although not all of them admitted to doing so regularly" (Copping 1). How will the children be able to learn if they have other people doing their homework for them? This is a serious issue relating to homework that causes children to fall behind.

Young adults like to find another convenience way to get around doing homework assignments. They like to copy off from their friends or cheat on their homework assignments. "The findings come as surveys and studies show a majority of students cheat-whether through cribbing homework, plagiarizing essays from the Internet, or texting test answers to a friend's cellphone--even though overwhelming majorities consider it wrong" (Spark 1). Cheating on homework assignments will not help the young adults learn anything but may do it again in the future. If the cheaters are caught, they would get in trouble and it may affect their academic's appearance and their future. Having no homework assignments could prevent many students from feeling the need to cheat and cause fewer issues for the students.

Most parents want their children to have the same way or better than when they had when they were growing up. Parents want their children to succeed and become the top in their class and they are willing to let their children have extra work. Some parents do not like changes and want homework assignments to be the same like it always has been for generations. When the school offered the idea of having no homework assignments to the parents, "The general mood of the room was, 'This isn't how I had it growing up.'" (Bock 1). This showed that parents would want their children to have it as hard as they did when they were growing up. Being pressured by parents could lead the students to be stressed out and it could hinder some of their children.

Some students have learning disability and homework can affect some of those disabilities. Disabilities such as dyslexia or some sort of attention disorder such as ADD can cause students to struggle on homework. There are many students that have at least one learning disability that struggle in school and the last thing they need is more work at home. “Instead researchers definite it as reading difficulty that is unexpected given a person’s level of intelligence and education that such learning difficulties affect 1 in 5 students and more than 10 million children nationwide” (Duplantier 1). Many students have some enforcement at school to help them learn at a standard rate. Homework assignments can be fatal to students with learning disabilities than those who do not.

Over the years, schools have been assigning work to be completed outside of school to the students hoping they would benefit from it. However, evidence shown that it does not benefit the young learners. Evidence shows that it is not beneficial for the students to have homework assignments, such as being stressed out, finding time to do homework assignments, lengthy assignments take times away from other productive activities after school, and it can hinder their academic performance. Eventually, more schools will realize that they need to change their method and abolish homework assignments. Homework assignments are not beneficial for the students and we should not be assigned homework assignments.

[Hypersniper]

YAYYYY SCIENCE WINS AGAINST HOME WORK

i remember in my british high school i got 25 or so pieces of homework per week horror

in britain it goes

primary school (3-11/12 years)
high school (11/12-16)
Sixth form (optional, 16/17-19)
College (Free,optional)
University (Not Free,optional)

[BrockSamson]

Homework has been assigned to students for many centuries as a method to improve student's theoretical and tacit knowledge on a particular subject. Homework assignments give students practice and improve their knowledge. However, research shows that homework assignments may not be beneficial for young learners. For instance, young adults could be overwhelmed with homework assignments that could lead to stress. Many students have sports, clubs, and other activities after school. These busy schedules do not allow time for homework to be effectively completed. Even though homework assignments may help students practice and understand academic materials better, it is not beneficial for students because it can lead to stress. Lengthy assignments take time away from other productive activities after school, which can actually hinder their academic performance.

The majority of the students can be overwhelmed with the amount of homework assignments they receive. When a student becomes overwhelmed, they might have to work all day and night to complete their homework assignment. Students who work overnight to finish their assignments, or project, get tired and are therefore inefficient the following day. "Staying up late doing homework assignments is not healthy habit and it only leads to circle of continual bad habits the next day." Being overwhelmed with homework assignments can cause a student to miss vital hours of sleep. Whenever a student becomes tired, they do not focus as much (Giles 1). Getting overwhelmed with homework assignments can cause more harm to the students and students will not benefit from doing their assignments.

Students are stressed out occasionally, and it could cause a negative impact on their lives. Young adults can be stressed out by homework assignments. Being overwhelmed with work, lifestyle, sports, and having homework added to your life can lead to stress. Parents can pressure the students because they want their children to succeed. "Students can feels pressured to do homework by high pressure parenting with Ivy League goals that leave students feeling empty inside" (Michaud 1). Students may have issues at home and they would have a hard time concentrating on their homework. Being stressed out will only harms the student instead of benefiting them.

Plenty of students struggled to find free time with everything going on in their life. Students spend about eight hours sleeping, and another eight hours at school, which leave them eight hours a day to do everything else. A lot of high school students are on at least one sport team, many students have to work, and many students have different activities they need to do in their life. "Teenagers, as a whole, need to have a well rounded social life, but excessive homework challenges the feasibility of extracurricular activities.(Giles, 1). In an increasingly global society, average students are finding it increasingly difficult to maintain what scientist call emotional quotient (EQ), which is positively correlated with social interaction. In fact, researchers are discovering that having a higher EQ is actually a better indicator of future success than IQ (intelligence quotient). You could therefore argue that, although academic skills play a vital role in a student’s future, developing social skills plays and equal if not greater role.

Low-income families who cannot afford to pay for internet are at a distinct disadvantage when it comes to proficiently completing homework, as many homework assignments may require Internet access. Students with no access are forced to stay after school, go to the library or go to public place with free Wi-Fi like McDonald's. "Access to the Web has expanded since then, but roughly a third of households with income of less than $30,000 a year and teens living at home still don't have broadband access there, according to the Pew Research Center" (Troianovski 1) If a student cannot go to a place with Wi-Fi, that student is forced to accept a zero for the assignment. Students, who have to travel just to get access to a source of Wi-Fi, expend more time and energy doing homework than those that have easy access. Therefore, homework places an undue burden on certain disadvantaged student looking for equality in education.

Many homework assignments, which I will call “busy work”, are not beneficial enough to justify the time expended and resources wasted. "By the time I got to that assignment, at 2 in the morning, I found it irrelevant, tedious and not worth doing" said junior Israel Hipolito.” I got high scores on tests but a lower grade because of the coloring assignment." (Hipolito 2) Irreverent homework assignments are very pointless and it just waste students' free time. Students can feel less motivated to do their homework assignment if they do not see the point in doing them.

A student might score no better than a D when tested in math, but because traditional grading awards points for handing in math homework, that student may earn a C or better in the class" (Bock, 1). According to the St. Charles High School, many students were on honor roll. After the school received their state test, they found out many of their students failed. Having a good grade does not reflect how much a student learns. From this we can extrapolate that, in some cases, tedious homework assignments do not equal academic success.

Several schools are implementing innovative methods for teaching the students. These schools are trying to teach the students without giving them homework assignments. Some teachers such as Becky Stevenson agreed that homework assignments should not be counted in your final grades. "She has been using pieces for the ideas in her classroom for at least five years, and gives feedback on homework even though it is not counted in the final grade, she also said her students have shifted from focusing on getting good grade to a desire to learn" (Bock 1). Students are learning better and desire to learn is a lot better for the students. Students may abuse the No Homework policy, but those who do will do worse on the tests according to Ethan Dobbs, a teacher who has the same policy. Evidence shows that no homework assignments are beneficial to the learners. < ------------ YOU BETTER FIND A CITATION FOR THAT SENTENCE.

Many schoolchildren may have other people to do their homework for them. Some parents do homework assignments for their children for various reasons. Parents may do homework assignments so their children could look good; make it easier for them, and save work for the parents. "A tenth of parents who took part said it saved stress if they did the work themselves, although not all of them admitted to doing so regularly" (Copping 1). How will the children be able to learn if they have other people doing their homework for them? This is a serious issue relating to homework which I argue is a valid reason for our education system to be so dependent on at home assignments.

Young adults find convenient ways to get around doing homework assignments; such as copying off friends or cheating on their homework assignments. "The findings come as surveys and studies show a majority of students cheat-whether through cribbing homework, plagiarizing essays from the Internet, or texting test answers to a friend's cellphone--even though overwhelming majorities consider it wrong" (Spark 1). Cheating on homework assignments will not help kids learn anything, and only furthers an inaccurate representation of that particular students academic progress. If the cheaters are caught, they would get in trouble and it may affect their academic's appearance and their future. Having fewer homework assignments may alleviate the student’s need or desire to cheat.

Most parents want their children to have the same way or better than when they had when they were growing up. Parents want their children to succeed and become the top in their class and they are willing to let their children have extra work. Some parents do not like changes and want homework assignments to be the same like it always has been for generations. When the school offered the idea of having no homework assignments to the parents, "The general mood of the room was, 'This isn't how I had it growing up.'" (Bock 1). This showed that parents would want their children to have it as hard as they did when they were growing up.

Some students have learning disability and homework can affect some of those disabilities. Disabilities such as dyslexia or various attention disorders such as ADHD can cause students to struggle with homework. There are many students that have at least one learning disability that struggle in school, and the last thing they need is more work at home. “Instead researchers define it as reading difficulty that is unexpected given a person’s level of intelligence and education that such learning difficulties affect 1 in 5 students and more than 10 million children nationwide” (Duplantier 1). ← Did you quote this correctly? Many students have schools with individualized academic programs to help them learn at a standard rate. Homework assignments can be fatal to students with learning disabilities precisely because homework is normally completed during a time when their medications are no longer in effect.

Over the years, schools have been assigning work to be completed outside of school to the students hoping they would benefit from it. However, evidence suggests that it does not benefit the young learners enough to justify what is lossed. Evidence shows that it is not beneficial for the students to have homework assignments, such as being stressed out, finding time to do homework assignments, lengthy assignments take times away from other productive activities after school, and it can hinder their academic performance. Eventually, more schools will realize that they need to change their method and abolish homework assignments. ←Basically rewrite everything that is bolded here…make it sound better. Homework assignments are not beneficial for the students and we should not be assigned homework assignments.

[BrockSamson]

You may need to spell ck my work, I didn't re-read it when I finished.

[Orpz]

PoD is deaf and has better mastery of language than me.

[powerofdeath]

PoD is deaf and has better mastery of language than me.

wut? My teacher said if I turned in this as my final copy, I would get C- for it.

[Orpz]

you need more transitory words to improve the flow

[louiswill]

/faint

[ypmagic]

Tutor.com

[powerofdeath]

Tutor.com

Im not paying for a tutor.

[Admiral]

Why are you coming here for homework help?

Not a good idea...

[Helz]

I would try to help but English is by far my weakest subject... I bet there's tons of 6th grade kids that could show me up in that area.

[Hypersniper]

Lol u got bad rep for posting on this saying

Don't help pod fgt

I think it was admiral

[Apocist]

YAYYYY SCIENCE WINS AGAINST HOME WORK

i remember in my british high school i got 25 or so pieces of homework per week horror

in britain it goes

primary school (3-11/12 years)
high school (11/12-16)
Sixth form (optional, 16/17-19)
College (Free,optional)
University (Not Free,optional)

College is free...? Apo wants...

[Frog]

"Most parents want their children to have the same way or better than when they had when they were growing up."

->

The majority of progenitors perpetuate the idealistic notion of providing an environment for their offspring that is of equal or preferably greater standard of living when compared to the progenitors' own upbringing.

When is this paper due by the way? Do you have a week left? A little restructuring and it would flow nicely.

*Never use the word "like" - you can replace it with "for example", "akin", "as", or if it's being used a verb... 'like' is powerless, but 'love' has the power to move mountains

I would have included the argument that homework is demanding too many hours dedicated towards theoretical memorization of the arbitrarily mundane in a time where those hours could better be served learning practical trades. AKA, instead of traditional homework assignments of workbooks, essays, and questions, that time could be spent being an apprentice towards the industry that you're most interested in. The modern equivalent would be 'internship'. Actual work experience that is often so far removed from the classic high school scholar leaves students with no basis or goal from which to base their studies. Basically you're arguing the merits of apprenticeship/interning over homework. A solid 2 paragraphs.

Frog <--- 5 AP Lit , 7 IB English Lit Higher Level, 1590 Old SAT, 2370 New SAT

[AppleyNO]

I rewrote your Introduction - Please don't steal it, I want you to see how I would write it

Homework has been assigned to students for many centuries to improve student's knowledge on a particular subject. Teachers give homework to students to allow for practice and to identify areas that the student still struggles in. However, researchers debate about the effectiveness of homework for an active student. Many students participate in extracurricular activities like clubs, sports, and community service. Combining these activities with the pressures of achieving in advanced classes, many students lack the time for homework to be effectively completed. Some students will even sacrifice sleep to perform well academically, which has been proven to hinder students in the long run(CITATION NEEDED). Homework assignments may help students practice and understand academic materials better, but the negative effects of lack of sleep, pressures from extracurricular activities, and advanced classes hinder the goals of homework.

Can you share the details of your assignment? Its hard to write without some guidelines.

Some pointers
Your introduction needs to go from generalization -> Thesis statement
Some of your sentences need transitions or rewordings.
Avoid personal pronouns that aren't quoted from a source.
You have way too many 5 sentence paragraphs discussing one thing.
You need better organization. Try to pick 4 or 5 major reasons why homework is not beneficial to a student, then give each of those paragraphs 7, 8, or even 9 sentences with several sources each.
Your essay, esp. your conclusion, is choppy. Try to vary sentence length.

Besides that, I think you got the content right. Take Brock's suggestions about citing and you'll be fine.

[AppleyNO]

"Most parents want their children to have the same way or better than when they had when they were growing up."

->

The majority of progenitors perpetuate the idealistic notion of providing an environment for their offspring that is of equal or preferably greater standard of living when compared to the progenitors' own upbringing.

When is this paper due by the way? Do you have a week left? A little restructuring and it would flow nicely.

I find the working too snobby. We are trying to write a functional essay, not pad the paper. xD

[AppleyNO]

AVOID QUOTING STUDENTS AND TEACHERS IN YOUR ESSAYS

Almost forgot that. Its really important that you don't even mention them. They aren't scholarly sources.

[Admiral]

Lol u got bad rep for posting on this saying

Don't help pod fgt

I think it was admiral

I did not give anyone positive or negative rep for any post in this thread.

[oops_ur_dead]

Anyway, to PoD, I'll be honest, but the reason that your teacher said she'd give you a C- probably isn't because of grammar, and I wholely agree with her assessment. The issue with your essay is that all your arguments are really, really weak. You go into about how homework does causes stress, and it (god forbid!) makes students have to do work, but you never talk about why any of that makes homework bad for students. A few paragraphs in your arguments stray from homework to universal internet access and grade inflation. Even if you fix all those issues, and prove that all of what you argue is detrimental to learning, you completely ignore any actual benefits from homework, and pretend that the negatives are all there is to it. Granted, I didn't read the entire thing because I gave up on it, so feel free to correct me if you actually did go into any of that and I'll read the entire thing. Here's what I had before I stopped:

Click here to view or download the file directly.

Except for a couple instances at the start, I ignored all the citation issues you had, because I'm assuming they don't expect much. I'd also get rid of all the quotes and paraphrase the ideas from them instead.

[AppleyNO]

Anyway, to PoD, I'll be honest, but the reason that your teacher said she'd give you a C- probably isn't because of grammar, and I wholely agree with her assessment. The issue with your essay is that all your arguments are really, really weak. You go into about how homework does causes stress, and it (god forbid!) makes students have to do work, but you never talk about why any of that makes homework bad for students. A few paragraphs in your arguments stray from homework to universal internet access and grade inflation. Even if you fix all those issues, and prove that all of what you argue is detrimental to learning, you completely ignore any actual benefits from homework, and pretend that the negatives are all there is to it. Granted, I didn't read the entire thing because I gave up on it, so feel free to correct me if you actually did go into any of that and I'll read the entire thing. Here's what I had before I stopped:
https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/6881780/essay.pdf

I completely agree with you.

[powerofdeath]

Alright thank you guys for reviewing this. I'll look over it tomorrow when I am working on it.

[oops_ur_dead]

I'd also like to take the opportunity to announce the new [pdf] tag which lets you embed pdf files in posts.

[Brendan]

I'd also like to take the opportunity to announce the new [pdf] tag which lets you embed pdf files in posts.

wow how useful im going embed all of my pdfs now great job